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    dots Submission Name: Pixie Potiondots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 416
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    dotsPixie Potiondots
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    Lips tremble
    breathless
    as ice
    on skin.
    A smear of pink
    mute pleas

    does time move?
    Or does it slide into eternal
    whispers and cry.
    O
    what a ride.

    Lovers hearts
    ethereally effervesce
    peppermints and posies
    our embers are so cozy

    We burn to stage an old play.
    It begins as a slow ballet
    with earth bound limitation.
    But we are crazy and love
    can change the rules.

    So we float
    in dreamy wonder
    beneath
    a pixie dusted coverlet
    of softly scented sighs.

    Each mote of dust becomes
    a diamond reflecting promises.
    The salty breeze is a sweet caress
    that holds our awe in thrall.

    Then day breaks upon drenched shore
    and glory dawns.
    Indeed
    some times happy endings

    are the start of new beginnings
    this is a lovers story after all.









    Submitted on 2012-10-27 17:26:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a fairy tale.

    The fairy tale, perhaps.

    This describes the flight of mad fancy that love can be...if one can be bold enough to believe in pixie dust and magic kisses.


    Well done, Dale.




    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      This is going to be at the top of my list. "The end" I suggest should be eliminated.
    I love this almost like a fairy tale.
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      class "a" stuff.
    | Posted on 2012-10-27 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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