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    dots Submission Name: The Dancedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsThe Dancedots
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                        Her evil knows no bounds
                        I tell you this is only truth!
                        Look how her fairness taunts me.
                        She lures me to blackness
                        simply by being luminous and pure.
                        O she is coy feigning guilelessness
                        as she dances up and down.
                        Her eyes would please a sorceress.
                        She is firm where it counts but otherwise
                        soft as those fluffy feathers of renown.
                        I think perdition behooves
                        a second chance,
                        for she has defiled me
                        with an angelic glance.




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      How ironic that everything good about her.. Her beauty, fairness, her light and purity.. Bring you into blackness. Reminds me of a serial killer. He sees something perfect and must make it his forever.
    | Posted on 2012-10-29 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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