Thank you so much for your generous response on my writing. I'd have to say, this is one of my writes I've written in the simplest possible way. just heartfelt ideas written randomly then put together in an organized way.. I really wanted to express how I feel but I can't say it to that person so I decided to put it in writing. After months of haven't been able to write, I am glad to know that this poetry has touched someone the way I didn't expect it.
Yes, about that two lines you've quoted.. I guess it is something everyone experiences. We may have an colorful, sometimes boring days, long, stressful, unforgettable.. but when night comes and we're alone, that's when we realize who we really want to be with. I guess, that is how I wanted to end the story of this piece. who do we really wish, hope, and try for?
I thought this was a great piece of writing, a true storybook feeling was apparent in the emotions, a sincerity in the words. Many pieces of writing fail to achieve a defining summary, I say this from personal experience and frustration. But here, here I believe your writing hints at your preferences, your feelings, your desires...and it emphasizes your depth for your beliefs.
"But at the end of each sunny day
when darkness brings you to bed"
These lines do not fail to definitively summarize what you are after, you make reference to variables no one can escape, no one can avoid, and essentially question the completeness of what he thinks he has. True love, the love you suggest you would provide, fades the boundaries between the day and night. In reference to your poetry, you know you would rather be the one he wishes to fall asleep next to.
I think the direction of your writing is very sincere, very honest. Keep it up.