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    dots Submission Name: Poem about my Nanny and her lifedots
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    Author: blackdemigod13
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    dotsPoem about my Nanny and her lifedots
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    Seventeen years ago I first saw your face,
    It was young and vibrant and your dress was made of lace.
    I didn't know then who you really were,
    But I always gave a smile when you would croon at me and purr.
    As I got older your young began to fade,
    But it was replaced by an even lovelier shade.
    It was no longer a case of young and old,
    For our relationship had entered a stage full of love that shined like gold.
    You taught me to accept others with open arms,
    As you found friends and family with your smile and your charm.
    You have many children of whom your womb does not know,
    But you never waver in your love, instead a great abundance is all you show.
    Your hugs are filled with tenderness,
    And they fill us all with your bliss.
    Your life makes everyone elses much brighter,
    Because you have always pulled through and came out a fighter.
    I love you more than I know how to say,
    So writing this poem is the only way.




    Submitted on 2012-10-29 07:32:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very sweet.

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    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Carosuel | [ Reply to This ]


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