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    dots Submission Name: Auradots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsAuradots
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    He's shrouded in a calming black
    and I in a frantic orange.
    Emptied eyes, stoic faced,
    and I desperately clinging to a facade.

    We are so different, my love.
    Played such fantastic games,
    that we no longer know ourselves.

    He wrings his bony hands, crack.
    or was that me?
    Galloping hearts collide.
    We're good at this.

    When skin-touches-skin,
    all is right again.
    "And breathe," said I.




    Submitted on 2012-10-30 06:14:53     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like the diversity of the characters. the picture is beautiful, and it is worded colorfully. at the end, the reader is left wanting more, bravo.
    | Posted on 2013-02-13 00:00:00 | by gwenn sundala | [ Reply to This ]
      We are two sides of the coin, two halves that make a whole. A visage of infinity with a wraper and the personification of physicality in context. We were meant for eachother. Yes, "All is right again", Your the yoni to my lingam, all is well again!!! God I wish I had one. Sounds like fun!!

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the line: Or was that me? The confusion of where one person ends and the other begins.
    | Posted on 2012-11-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      It has color lets say?
    | Posted on 2012-10-31 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      Hehe! Frantic orange! I like that a lot. Orange is my favorite color, especially the stronger tones. This is simple and cute, I like it!
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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