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The Composition of Words


Author: Carosuel
ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96 /73 /28
Words: 116
Class/Type: Poetry /Religious
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Nothing too deep, just playing around with a certain word in my head, and the thought struck me.


The Composition of Words



Clanking of pipes,
Vocal chords, anyway.
And a word washed down the drain.

And in a sound,
An echo can live.
Lost forever, obsessed with,
The voice of a sound.

If words dwell in radiance,
The blush of a sunrise,
And the flush of a sunset.
An echo lives in a shadow.
On a cold cement bed,
Urban chilled life.
Tormented by it’s timid voice,
Withdrawing into itself.

In a different world,
Syllables would be fundamental.
The shape of a sound is dependent,
On the beat of the word.
Something sensual,
In the rolling of the tongue.
The angles of a jaw dropping,
And the curve of a word.





Submitted on 2012-10-30 06:18:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The angles of a jaw dropping...sweet imagery, my Precious One.
| Posted on 2012-11-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
  Much to do about nothing.
| Posted on 2012-10-31 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
  I like this, especially the last part. It's important to think about this as a writer but not too much imo. Sometimes you just gotta let words flow out, let emotions, not analytical thought, gather behind them and push them forward.
| Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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