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    dots Submission Name: The Composition of Words dots
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    Author: Carosuel
    ASL Info:    26/F/Twirlwind
    Elite Ratio:    4.93 - 96/73/28
    Words: 116
    Class/Type: Poetry/Religious
    Total Views: 1086
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       Nothing too deep, just playing around with a certain word in my head, and the thought struck me.


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    dotsThe Composition of Words dots
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    Clanking of pipes,
    Vocal chords, anyway.
    And a word washed down the drain.

    And in a sound,
    An echo can live.
    Lost forever, obsessed with,
    The voice of a sound.

    If words dwell in radiance,
    The blush of a sunrise,
    And the flush of a sunset.
    An echo lives in a shadow.
    On a cold cement bed,
    Urban chilled life.
    Tormented by itís timid voice,
    Withdrawing into itself.

    In a different world,
    Syllables would be fundamental.
    The shape of a sound is dependent,
    On the beat of the word.
    Something sensual,
    In the rolling of the tongue.
    The angles of a jaw dropping,
    And the curve of a word.





    Submitted on 2012-10-30 06:18:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The angles of a jaw dropping...sweet imagery, my Precious One.
    | Posted on 2012-11-01 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]
      Much to do about nothing.
    | Posted on 2012-10-31 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this, especially the last part. It's important to think about this as a writer but not too much imo. Sometimes you just gotta let words flow out, let emotions, not analytical thought, gather behind them and push them forward.
    | Posted on 2012-10-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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