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    dots Submission Name: Love Chasedots

    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.51 - 60/63/33
    Words: 90
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsLove Chasedots

    Heavy heart full of want,
    yearning for more.
    Leaps from my chest like a frog chasing the fly,
    that tries desperately to survive,
    at no remorse.
    As my withering soulless body lied out on the floor
    awaits its return.
    With hope in finding its seemingly unattainable cure.
    Heart filled in faith, intentions pure,
    and yet still cursed.
    For not even the rich
    could find such happiness to endure,
    A pain thats unmatched
    by the unrequitted love of the one you adore.

    Submitted on 2012-10-30 19:19:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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