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    dots Submission Name: Redemptiondots
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    Author: Darkwarrior
    ASL Info:    27
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 60/64/37
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsRedemptiondots
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    As my consciousnesses becomes clearer
    with each waking of the day,
    I begin to thoroughly give forgiveness
    to that stubborn face.
    The one that peers through my reflection,
    hardly showing solstice for its unwelcome inhabitance.
    I do not know your name.
    For whom do I offer thanks?
    Who do I give credit to showing me the way?
    I slept for sometime and you brought air to my lungs,
    kept me alive in the day.
    But night dawned,
    you caused me nothing but harm.
    And still to you I give thanks.
    For there is no better way to wake
    then to return from a life of shame.
    And still appreciate the pain.




    Submitted on 2012-10-30 19:26:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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