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    dots Submission Name: Moon Doomeddots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsMoon Doomeddots
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                   The moon returned again tonight.
                   She tried to snuggle up to me in bed.
                   it matters not that I spurn her advances.
                   I told her I love another but she whispers
                   "I am here now! Where is she?"

                   This morning I confront
                   those accusing brown eyes.
                   They see the moon glow stain on my collar.
                   They know I was up all night
                   goggling my blue eyes at the moon again.
                   "please," I cry
                   "the moon means nothing to me
                   I was only lonely and confused
                   missing your brown eyes."
                   but
                   It is no use
                   I am doomed.




    Submitted on 2012-11-02 18:08:20     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      "I am here now! Where is she?"

    This line goes really well with the picture. I'm not a fan of the second part though. I think you could drop it entirely. Only the first part under that picture would look gorgeous!
    | Posted on 2012-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      'moon glow stains on my collar'...that's one good line, I love the image it conjures.

    I love the idea of having an affair with the moon- and how romantic that might be.

    When we're missing our one, it can be so hard to keep missing.

    Lovely little poem, Dale.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]
      Everything feels the same in the dark.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Ha, this is cute. I like the image of moon glow stains on your collar. It's refreshing to see the lighter side of my lovely moon.

    Well done Dale :)
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]


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