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    dots Submission Name: speculationdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 71
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1105
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    Bytes: 525



    Description:
       If only he could enter my mind to know how I think and not to rely on speculations.



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    dotsspeculationdots
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    I decompose
    quietly, breathlessly
    on a slightly eroded ground
    lying on each blade of grass
    speculating cuts
    with the unruffled wind of
    waiting

    You, apart
    sit upon a shore
    taking years off your eyes
    of colorfast blue
    I pierce deep into your waters
    add to them my tears
    prefering silence, a you;
    a love.


    We, rearrange
    the word goodbye
    to be a sparrow

    too afraid to fly.




    Submitted on 2012-11-03 06:40:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The pacing and imagery here are just lovely. It has a sort of breathless feel to it, a breathless sorrow or waiting that feels impossible to bear, but will be borne nonetheless.

    And this:


    We, rearrange
    the word goodbye
    to be a sparrow

    too afraid to fly.


    is stunning. I'm always enamored with poetry that successfully transforms a human emotion into something palpable or tangible, and you've done that here with this section. I love it, honestly.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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