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    dots Submission Name: love and youdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotslove and youdots
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    I'm here 
    and
    gone
    I love,
    I know you
    to be a place
    where I resides
    tread through
    only to move
    to other spaces of you

    form me a circle
    hold



    me
    I dream, wait
    and wake with self's shape
    tailored by love
    and
    YOU


    Your whispers
    float in the sky
    a blue impostor
    of your eyes
    give me words for stars
    to decipher
    you are larger than
    love's outbound
    space.




    Submitted on 2012-11-03 08:17:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this is radically wonderful. I feel like your heart is speaking directly to mine there are no shades of concealment only different levels of truth. Levels of truth that are necessary to convey all the suitabilities of a woman's feelings. I am quite spellbound and amazed by this poem and I have been for a long time I just could not find a large enough way to write how I felt about this one and I still can not but you deserve to at least know I am totally taken and moved by this it is wonderful.
    | Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      I think this is pretty.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Very strong start for me and I like the spaces between "hold and me" great emphasis there. I like the simplicity and you played with the words and the format. Definitely something new from you.









    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by quicksorrow | [ Reply to This ]


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