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    dots Submission Name: Indifferent Hallwaysdots
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    Author: EmptyBox
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 76/64/31
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Just because we fucked doesn't mean you have to talk to me.
    I'm old enough to know things we say during such closeness,
    it's all bullshit and filler. You don't have to hide or avoid my eyes
    because I am really just looking through you to another side
    where someone else will look at me one day, and light up
    like stars on a Christmas tree
    or a moon traced on paper
    with a big wide smile
    just for me.






    Submitted on 2012-11-03 10:25:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is actually very healthy. fucking is fucking. it shouldn't be a big thing. especially at a certain age. and it's good you don't get hung up. i've never been able to do a one night stand. i just don't have the heart to take the chance to hurt a girl like that. i remember everything with my emotions, so i try my best to keep women in a positive category. it doesn't always work, and i need to learn to be more honest with myself.
    | Posted on 2012-12-10 00:00:00 | by Arjay | [ Reply to This ]
      This is harsh also very raw and emotive the F word belongs in this for me it anchors the outrage that follows.
    Also someone needs a thrashing I would use a cane u can't beat a cane when it comes to administering a good beating.
    | Posted on 2012-11-03 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]


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