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    Author: brokenbatman
    Elite Ratio:    2.99 - 475/233/44
    Words: 307
    Class/Type: Story/Misc
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    Testing Third Person
    James testing his control over the immediate environment paused and took a deep breath before stepping onto the surface of the pond water. He chose to focus on the hollowed out tree trunk sitting directly across from him. Taking steps slowly he watches an alligator slide stealthily into the water at his right. A common water snake catches his eye as it glides across the water to investigate. In the instance he has taken his eyes off the gator he has put himself at risk. The gator is attacking and all at once James lets out a panicked screech and lifts his hands in an instinctive sub conscious attempt to ward off the creature. In this moment he grabs hold of the animals snake and alligator alike with an invisible hand of power.

    Testing First Person
    While testing the control over my immediate environment I paused for a nerve settling deep breath before stepping out onto the surface of my pond. Having a bit of fear inside I decide to focus on an old hollowed out tree stump directly across from were I am standing. Slowly edging out onto the water I use slow steps and I canít help but notice a huge alligator slip into the water at my right side. What is that? It is a black water snake and itís swimming towards me. Oh no the gator, itís to close I canít stop it! The gator is opening its mouth attacking me and I scream in terror and throw my hands up instinctively to swat it away. In this moment I can feel myself lift the creature out of the water but I am not touching it and that is when I notice I am holding the snake to. Holding them both with some strange invisible grip.




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