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    dots Submission Name: bummerdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
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    dotsbummerdots
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                             Today was a darker day
                             than yesterday which was darker
                             by far than the day before.
                             Already I think the sun has had enough
                             and is heading for distant shore.

                             We had another damn
                                       rainbow today
                                  it ended right out there by the                                    pond.
                             Makes three rainbows this week!

                             I want to know who is going
                             to clean up all that blasted gold.
                             Its killing the grass and too heavy
                             to be raked. You can't tell me
                             this is natural either. Supposed to
                             be Leprechauns watching out for this
                             crap. And ain't is supposed to show up                          in
                             a pot?




    Submitted on 2012-11-03 22:41:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think you meant: We had another ONE of those damn rainbows. I really like that middle part.
    | Posted on 2012-11-06 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked this a lot. I wish it were true then everything would be really great in life and everybody would plant trees everywhere.
    | Posted on 2012-11-04 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]


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