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    dots Submission Name: You againdots

    Author: closetpoet
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 51/106/70
    Words: 115
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsYou againdots

    come to me; set me free
    on my knees, my hour of need
    all of my desires, loveís decree
    the best of me, you'll always be

    heaven and hell may turn to dust
    time and distance, 'tween the two of us
    vacant and alone, no longer do I fear
    I'll breath, I'll dream, I'll have you near

    awash in you, as when love is new
    shaken by the sight of you
    even after nothingís new
    I surrender to the void thatís you

    on you the sun would rise and set
    in you, all my needs were met
    you said you needed to be free
    and what you left, is no longer me

    Submitted on 2012-11-06 18:30:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really love this... thanks for sharing
    | Posted on 2012-11-10 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice work, I loved how you kept the same emotion right through your poem..
    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by YoungKaizen | [ Reply to This ]

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