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    dots Submission Name: Syllabusdots

    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    I read a poem once about unrequited love,
    Only I �thought at first it said unrequired loved,

    Which is a whole other animal entirely.
    And so, having that idea in my head,��

    unrequired love became a love I wished for:
    An essay submitted purely as offering,�

    A sacrificial work of your own hands,�
    neither asked for nor expected. �

    Write me a poem, a metaphor�
    that breaks�the bank and turns clich�s�

    on their heads, makes a mockery of form.
    Write me a novella, chronicle of our love,�

    Only because you want to, not because
    you saw this poem. �

    Submitted on 2012-11-08 18:47:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I'm afraid your tenderness is unrequired
    and every little kiss a cul de sac of fire
    clucked a little gnome who took the chance
    of angering the queen before they danced...
    | Posted on 2012-11-15 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      I really enjoyed it, the angle makes it personal but you go out from that with the write me stuff and then come back to it again.

    it makes me think that in some ways all poetry is poetry like that, a person writes it but after that who's to say who keeps it for a home. and that is nice, the duality that it can be personal and so too universal.

    I could read a book of that.
    Do you need me to say good writing?
    | Posted on 2012-11-10 00:00:00 | by Daniel Barlow | [ Reply to This ]
      Your playful dance with words is amazing. It's so hard to say words sometimes just because we want to. I've said I love you and I'm sorry so many times only because I thought it was the right thing to say, it was conventional or there were no other words to fill a long awkward, silent gap. Such a wrong use for these such powerful phrases. Your poem was inspiring as well. It reminded me of something my friend would do and actually did recently. She read one of my posts and it inspired her to write a poem in response. Her poem was great, light and optimistic. I felt grateful that she dedicated it to me and elated that I had inspired such words.

    Beautiful read.
    | Posted on 2012-11-10 00:00:00 | by Katrinagolden | [ Reply to This ]
      "only because you want to/ not because you saw this poem"

    like saying "i love you" because you want to...not because i said it first.

    i love the idea of "a mockery of form"---

    glad i stopped by and saw this...

    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Wind blows as carefree
    as my heart reaching to thee
    Open; unconcerned

    I, without the fight
    yearn still meticulously.
    Silent settlement.

    Another day passed
    Full of fire-glazed contentment;
    the breeze blooms de-stin-y.
    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by Dolor | [ Reply to This ]

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