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    Author: Queen_of_spades
    ASL Info:    21/F/Nocturne
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 95/166/107
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 681
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    Description:
       7/9/2012

    I had a bout of self hate. It happens.


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    Crocodile tears
    Realizing your fears
    Wondering why
    Everything is wrong
    Like notes in a song
    Breaking your wings
    So you can't fly

    The grip of uncertainty
    has yet again found it's way
    Around your heart
    All you wanted
    was to be beautiful
    Inside and out
    But nothing can
    scrub out your lungs
    or fix your voice

    You've made some mistakes
    But haven't we all?
    You can not escape
    the oppressive heat
    of expectation

    Crocodile tears
    Realizing your fears
    Everything went wrong
    Because you were done all along
    You've never had wings
    There's more to life than things
    You never could fly
    Stop asking why

    You're nothing
    that you thought you were
    Undeserved sense of confidence
    Reverence will be your salvation
    Willow trees sway with the wind
    And so too shall you

    You must hate yourself so much
    To do the things you do





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      You know the human mind is pretty much incapable of comprehending the complexity of their toenails integration in time, it's the atomic physics facts, even the synaptic syntax of their mentality is somewhat beyond them. The decadent arrogant might disagree but I don't think they really know themselves, what do you think??? Sheer barratry, or pragmatic practicality.

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    | Posted on 2012-11-09 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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