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    dots Submission Name: Escapadedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsEscapadedots
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                        The caress of Ice
                        Forever lite
                        Dances devil bright
                        in the capitulating light
                        Of our wayward sun
                        Is it me our is it blue
                        This is me looking at you
                        Speak no evil when I am near
                        Take my hand and dry your tears
                        Please forgive me
                        I am drowning in brown
                        e
                        y
                        e
                        s
                        I am deep- deep and still going down
                        By shine that glows and catch of breath
                        It's the two of us defying death
                        The river Lethe runs through my days
                        washing every memory away save
                        For the escapade
                        That begins
                        With You




    Submitted on 2012-11-10 17:24:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Hope your escapade point arrives soon :)
    | Posted on 2012-11-11 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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