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    dots Submission Name: I'm Trouble. dots
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    Author: BestxDeceptions
    ASL Info:    22, Female, Kentucky.
    Elite Ratio:    2.23 - 25/66/49
    Words: 83
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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       I haven't written in a really long time, so I'm trying to ease in. All criticisms welcome.


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    dotsI'm Trouble. dots
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    I'm dirty, polluted,
    selfish, mistaken.
    I'm lost in my head
    I'm uncertain and vacant.

    Slipping and falling,
    gasping and pulling.
    Forever a letter
    static reviling.

    How can I heal
    when I barely survive.
    How can laugh
    when it constitutes lies?

    I fumble for reason,
    searching for sooth,
    terrified by nightmares
    of the actions I choose.

    Writhing and reeling,
    humbled and cold.
    secrets speak nothing
    i have yet to know.




    Submitted on 2012-11-11 23:53:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Thank you so much! I really appreciate that!
    | Posted on 2012-11-17 00:00:00 | by BestxDeceptions | [ Reply to This ]
      i absolutely love your poem, it's been about 5 years since i've been writing and i wish my new poems were as good as this. so much depth and insight. i look forward to reading more of your poems
    | Posted on 2012-11-17 00:00:00 | by Nessyjane | [ Reply to This ]


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