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    dots Submission Name: Holding Backdots
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    Author: YoungKaizen
    ASL Info:    25/M/Brooklyn,NYC
    Elite Ratio:    1.26 - 4/6/19
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
    Total Views: 764
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    Bytes: 710



    Description:
       Being Lost


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    dotsHolding Backdots
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    Lord how can I reach my true potential when I'm now holding back?

    In situations I'm supposed to dominate I'd rather people catch up

    Maybe because I'm scared of their reaction or maybe I'm just lost

    How can I be all I could be when people can't handle my success

    I'm I supposed to stand there and wonder or must I make a move?

    Or is wanting the right thing done stopping me from getting it done?

    Because thinking good slows me down while other people are going

    Not knowing how my next move will end up is holding me back..








    Submitted on 2012-11-12 03:42:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      You should edit more carefully.

    Line 2 supposed
    Line 5 Am I supposed
    Line 8 holding

    Can you explain this to me? What is it you're doing that you're having trouble performing up to par? Your job, your missionary service for God, what is it???

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-11-12 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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