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    dots Submission Name: The Senses of Wardots
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    Author: truthbetold
    ASL Info:    20-f
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 38/45/33
    Words: 76
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Written at the age of 16, I aced my project, and recieved words of appreciation from veterans and those still serving to this day... Prayers go out to all the families who have lost someone or who have someone serving overseas.


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    dotsThe Senses of Wardots
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    The echoing of the raging brass,
    Dirt and bodies flying fast.

    Screams and cries heard all around,
    The scent of death on the ground.

    Their wounds unpatched, going about their way,
    Not caring if they're going to live today.

    To fight for their lives and the lives of others,
    To save their sisters and their brothers.

    God, please help them get through the night,
    In hopes they return from this brutal fight.




    Submitted on 2012-11-16 19:52:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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