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    dots Submission Name: Optimismdots
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    Author: monad
    ASL Info:    64/M/California
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 1082/406/116
    Words: 20
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       Spectral grace


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    I'll walk with you tomorrow along the endless shore, while the primal tides are beckoning what has never been before.




    Submitted on 2012-11-18 20:52:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Everything you do is so profound. Your imagery is crisp, your flow is captivating and your words always ring so true. It makes me wonder if you are published. I would put you up for favorites bruce. I delight in your work the same way I would hemmingway, or millay, or one of my other great favs. Thanks for continuing to perform exceptionally.
    | Posted on 2015-03-13 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      looking forward to looking forward interesting. I love this it's the first piece of yours I've read that didn't make me feel stupid. My vocab has diminished a bit as most of my conversations are with my four year old.
    | Posted on 2014-06-29 00:00:00 | by shaman | [ Reply to This ]
      I'll walk with you tomorrow
    along the endless shore,
    while primal tides are beckoning
    what's never been before.

    And as we breathe the ocean air,
    smiling, hand in hand,
    the moon will taunt the waters edge
    while foot prints mark the sand.

    Just messing with it.
    I like the simplicity and meter.
    Positively positive.
    :)
    | Posted on 2014-01-30 00:00:00 | by KimmyMim | [ Reply to This ]
      Hope sustains life. This precise and concrete piece is conveying the message. Very impactive.
    | Posted on 2013-09-19 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      I could see this as a haiku too. Short and sweet and to the point :)
    | Posted on 2013-08-14 00:00:00 | by lolaxelmo | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this so much, almost like a whisper and a promise all mixed up in this. Simply captivating...;-)
    | Posted on 2013-01-30 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      That sums up things sparklingly. Eternal aspects either way.
    | Posted on 2012-12-23 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the description of the piece as much as the piece itself. I love these simple expressions, so satisfying, also easy to quote, lol. The impact will be significant with such ease! HOW AWESOME! Encouraging. Something to look FORWARD to. Lol> I am having so much fun reacting to the piece. Thanks for sharing. Enjoyed.
    | Posted on 2012-12-22 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you have titled this perfectly. Nothing is more optimistic than making a promise. Uplifting.
    Chris
    | Posted on 2012-11-30 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm not sure that I see the relevance of spectral grace....maybe... a little. I guess, yeah, I could see a passed away couple walking along the beach or something. Kind of brings that to mind. But spectral would indicate old, and this seems to be leading to new.

    So, Optimism is a very fitting title.


    I liked it. Short, thought-provoking. Quite beautiful, really.

    <3 Sweets.
    | Posted on 2012-11-21 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]
      This horribly awesome lol :)
    Though my optimism has been lacking these days, this brings hope to a hopeless pessimist. I like the images in this too. Painted perfectly for any eyes to read and feast heavenly

    ~T.I.D

    (You can still call me Aljx) I just get bored doing the same things over and over) <~ random
    | Posted on 2012-11-20 00:00:00 | by TangledInDreams | [ Reply to This ]
      i think the poem is a little long...maybe you should cut some of it out...just kidding...

    it is so powerful for two lines...and leaves us with many ways to look at it.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2012-11-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Optimism works. Just right.

    Seems like you didnt need much help with that...
    | Posted on 2012-11-19 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      "Getting our Toes Wet"

    or

    "Waiting for the Wading"
    | Posted on 2012-11-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      An invitation? An invocation?
    Thats all Ive got for title ideas...

    This is an interesting bit of prose...short and sweet. :)
    | Posted on 2012-11-19 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]


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