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    dots Submission Name: Humanity: dots
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    Author: Dolor
    ASL Info:    21/m
    Elite Ratio:    6.06 - 129/158/79
    Words: 52
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsHumanity: dots
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    Hemispheres
    full of fear
    its people prejudiced
    by the dimensional and geospatial
    fooled by place or by
    colored faces taste grey;
    but by the end of the era
    trends will tend
    to find the way
    to stomp non-believers
    believing everyone's born a sinner
    and that I'm always a god-damned winner.




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      This hits me in so many ways I almost feel pummeled, nonetheless I still feel I doughty nuance have viable arguments to tender. Being corporeal beings we are naturally prejudiced. When we attempt to be juxtapositional from our adjunct position this becomes a synthetically conjugational conjecture. Who am I to think that I have the xenobiotics you biological need. Perhaps similar states of analogous collusion, but your metabolic integration is more than I can fathom. It's somewhat natural for us to reject each other on this level. Sure it's prejudice but we're incapable of melding on this level. Further, of spatiotemporal telemetry tactician we all must react to our environment from our own unique position, it's the tellurian terrene in terrestrial equestrian. Sure spiritualism is beautiful and undoubtably has a power all its own but it would be irreverent to think it's universally applicable on a physical level. As for stomping non-believers I admit I want to apply embark embargo extradition to people who think they can be this kind of universally applicable. Sort of practice extraversion embezzlement euthanasia extortion on their febrile fanaticalness. I know it's sinful but why can't we all portray an individually totalitarian structural form. In human form it would be nice of humanitarian instinct if we all were winners here!! Then we could fine tune our preternatural propensities for the betterment of all and become even stronger, more vibrantly fecund indeed, instead of wallowing in the sins of the aggressors and assimilators!! Sheer ambrosia, right? I mean I realize we're not ethereally sublime but here's to your intransigent impudence and pugnacious audacity, may you always be a winner, unless your just a sinner.

    Bruce
    | Posted on 2012-11-19 00:00:00 | by monad | [ Reply to This ]


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