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    dots Submission Name: Obsession mk2dots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    37, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.37 - 131/123/76
    Words: 323
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 1283
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1884



    Description:
       I just did a quick rewrite of a song I wrote an age ago.
    I can never format the words to portray how it should actually be sung.
    This should be a little closer.
    Thanks for the input on this one guys, I made a few changes to the words on your advice ;)


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    dotsObsession mk2dots
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    Saw her face across the bar
    A thud inside, I fell for her
    Staring through a whiskey glass
    I want to take her home but I daren't ask
    I swear Iíve seen that face before
    Whether once upon a dream I donít know
    Could it be she might be mine?
    But I canít see
    Behind those eyes

    She drives me crazy,
    but I donít know her name
    The only thought left in my mind is when I next can see her face
    Iím,
    crazy
    Though I know she donít want me
    Iíve gotta hold her one more time
    before I go insane completely

    Every week a different guy
    It hurts inside but I don't know why
    'cause every night sheís here with me
    Iím not alone with her in my dreams

    I see her smile, I see those eyes
    I try to speak but my tongue gets tied
    She says my name and I feel punch drunk
    And then I taste her lips
    And I wake up

    She drives me crazy,
    but I donít know her name
    The only thought left in my mind is when I next can see her face
    Iím,
    crazy
    Though I know she donít want me
    Iíve gotta hold her one more time
    before I go insane completely

    Iíve been thinking on you way too long
    I canít see myself inside my thoughts
    my hearts as heavy as this gun
    thatís loaded now but not for long.
    Hear the click that sees me through?
    'cause all I ever want is you.
    Iíve gotta take away the pain
    though Iíd love to say that youíre to blame.
    My Doctor tells me that itís me
    obsessiveness is my disease
    and now I think Iíve found the cure,
    cock the hammer, hit the floor.

    'cause I,
    fell
    for
    you




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