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    dots Submission Name: Together <3dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 181
    Class/Type: Fanfic/Depressed
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    dotsTogether <3dots

    Here we are … lingering within this hell
    Together we hold on tight
    For others have knowingly or unknowingly produced these surrounding for us
    We fight the good fight
    We have each other’s backs

    Yet we reside within this hell
    Hell on earth
    Lingering here …
    Fighting for what we deserve
    Fighting for what is owed to us

    Yet, I am becoming quite exhausted
    Drained by all these consistent, annoying, and unfortunate occurrences that seem to only happen to us
    Day after Day
    Event after Event
    Each and every step we take forward together
    There had to be a bloody fight put up first…
    Mentally I am Done
    Physically I am Finished
    Emotionally I am Uncontrollable

    A person can only take so much shit
    A person can only fight for so long
    Until there just isn’t any fight left
    Until that willpower that once was alive and roaring has extinguished

    Together we reside within this hell
    Together we fight within this hell
    And together we lie down and let it all go…

    Submitted on 2012-11-21 19:42:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was amazing:)
    | Posted on 2012-12-02 00:00:00 | by lilsweetie | [ Reply to This ]
      I always say Happy day but it doesn't sound like it! This raw piece screams out and seems like hope is no where even though you try. Never give up trying and find, whatever that one thing is - even if minute by minute to appreciate you have a gift to give and you can recreate this hell.

    Thanks for sharing smiles to share :-)
    | Posted on 2012-11-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]

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