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    Author: BrokenLove
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    Blurry visions of the past
    haunt my now corrupted dreams.

    Brining me down
    on my knees
    begging for salvation.

    Salvation of those who have fell,
    those who have stood up,
    those who lay forever still.

    Whispers of the heart faded,
    erased completely from life.

    Disney lands and fairy tales
    dance in temptations around me.

    Words of wrenched chains
    pulls at my wrists, cutting deep.

    I break away,
    slicing even deeper.

    Finally I pass
    over freedoms divide.






    Fate, you’ve become so bittersweet... so painful now.
    Why have you forsaken me... what did I do?

    You let me go, out into this hell alone,
    not knowing how to breathe, more or less stand.

    I cope and begin to learn of my surroundings,
    then everything changes, and I once more am lost.

    Sirens and soft whispers dance in echos around me.
    I try to speak, but I’ve forgotten how...

    Eyes of remorse gauntly stare at me... knowing.
    My soul begins to cry as I close my crimson eyes.

    Dreams, take me away upon your silken wings.
    Listening to angels soft tunes, dance with me.

    Kiss my burning eyes, caress my flesh as a rest.
    Don’t let me awake into my nightmares so bleak....

    Painfully I awake.







    The moons dimmed rays beat down on me as clouds fill the ocean sky.
    Cool winds caress my body, arousing my every sense,
    opening my eyes, seeing the eternal beauty of mother nature.
    I begin to race forward, only noise is the whispers of my thoughts and the vast breaths I take.
    The world around me begins to blur as I gain speed, soon to reach my destination.
    It is unknown the road im traveling, unknown of where it might end.

    Stop! Hault! Who goes there?! I hear from voices all around.
    Such an uneasy but yet pleasant sound... “Who are you?” I ask.
    “Voices of the future, voices of the past, voices of the now.”
    they sing, wrapping their words around me like a silk sheet of ease.

    Many emotions rise within me, but not fear,
    I don’t know who these voices are,
    nor why they are here.

    I feel the heat of anger boiling within me,
    I feel the sorrow of great losses,
    I feel the pain of loves creation..
    I feel the lightness of laughter,
    the promises of forever after.


    As I sit here tonight my heart is pained beyond reason;
    my stomach is in knots and they keep getting tighter.

    Oh Lord, why must I be so stupid?

    The maturity of which I was so proud
    has forsaken me now, on this night of utter torment.
    My eyes burn with every tear of the millions I shed,
    even now my whole body aches for knowledge,
    but I am denied...

    Lies dance around pulling the threads of my life’s tapestry.
    Crumbling at my feet, what was once beautiful.

    My whole being aches, my body trembles;
    I can not feel the cold nor hot,
    only pain, sheer and agonizing pain.
    Fear of what is unknown tortures my soul;

    “What is coming next...?
    Has my heart forsaken me,
    left me standing here with my thoughts,
    what is going to happen?
    How will my life ever be sown back together like It was before?”

    Oh Lord, Jesus Christ, tonight of all nights I prey;
    I prey for your hand to pull out of the ditch on that road
    where I left my heart, where I died.
    Your hand held me tonight keeping my body safe;
    I ask of you, I beg of you, I plead, please help my heart from that ditch,
    save my heart from the torment my mind induces me to.














    As I sit here tonight my heart is pained beyond reason;
    my stomach is in knots and they keep getting tighter.

    Oh Lord, why must I be so stupid?

    The maturity of which I was so proud
    has forsaken me now, on this night of utter torment.
    My eyes burn with every tear of the millions I shed,
    even now my whole body aches for knowledge,
    but I am denied...

    Lies dance around pulling the threads of my life’s tapestry.
    Crumbling at my feet, what was once beautiful.

    My whole being aches, my body trembles;
    I can not feel the cold nor hot,
    only pain, sheer and agonizing pain.
    Fear of what is unknown tortures my soul;

    “What is coming next...?
    Has my heart forsaken me,
    left me standing here with my thoughts,
    what is going to happen?
    How will my life ever be sown back together like It was before?”

    Oh Lord, Jesus Christ, tonight of all nights I prey;
    I prey for your hand to pull out of the ditch on that road
    where I left my heart, where I died.
    Your hand held me tonight keeping my body safe;
    I ask of you, I beg of you, I plead, please help my heart from that ditch,
    save my heart from the torment my mind induces me to.

    As I sit here tonight my heart is pained beyond reason;
    my stomach is in knots and they keep getting tighter.

    Oh Lord, why must I be so stupid?

    The maturity of which I was so proud
    has forsaken me now, on this night of utter torment.
    My eyes burn with every tear of the millions I shed,
    even now my whole body aches for knowledge,
    but I am denied...

    Lies dance around pulling the threads of my life’s tapestry.
    Crumbling at my feet, what was once beautiful.

    My whole being aches, my body trembles;
    I can not feel the cold nor hot,
    only pain, sheer and agonizing pain.
    Fear of what is unknown tortures my soul;

    “What is coming next...?
    Has my heart forsaken me,
    left me standing here with my thoughts,
    what is going to happen?
    How will my life ever be sown back together like It was before?”

    Oh Lord, Jesus Christ, tonight of all nights I prey;
    I prey for your hand to pull out of the ditch on that road
    where I left my heart, where I died.
    Your hand held me tonight keeping my body safe;
    I ask of you, I beg of you, I plead, please help my heart from that ditch,
    save my heart from the torment my mind induces me to.































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