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    dots Submission Name: Without Purposedots
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    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 139
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       In being without purpose.


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    dotsWithout Purposedots
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    Our words are vague and settled,
    a thief of sorts has taken my purpose.
    Emphasis, surely, revisits my thoughts
    as consequence mounts against me.

    Rather than pursue life, we have
    channeled our aggression through fault,
    insinuating the collapse of
    promising, genuine provocation.

    Exhausted for arguing the day away,
    our intentions to recreate dignity
    in the face of such sure failure
    have indeed all but failed at this point.

    Illustrate to me, woman, the
    degree of your love, your kindness?
    I have been stripped of my words,
    and so I have asked for yours,
    requested they be given in the name
    of a marriage and our two sons.

    Your silence, however, mimics
    the devastation taken place today,
    the fallout to come tomorrow,
    and the eternity for which our
    purpose will be made to wander.




    Submitted on 2012-11-25 23:14:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to the frustration, the sentiment behind the piece. How we can come to a place where we forget where we started and no longer know how to say anything that might be useful in prolonging/repairing a situation. In that way this is quite effective in getting to the heart of the issue.

    It almost feels like a letter one partner might write to the other in hopes of coming to a place where they could meet and maybe begin to rediscover that purpose. In that way I like the honesty of it- as a believer in the power of honesty.

    For me, the cream of the poetry comes in S4 where I really feel the press of the emotion and the desperation of the speaker. If I were to offer a critique it would be that I'd like to see more of that style woven throughout the poem, but I feel this is a getting off the chest type poem and sometimes those are best left alone. But, I'll leave that thought, for good measure just in case it might prove useful.
    | Posted on 2012-11-27 00:00:00 | by emwren | [ Reply to This ]


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