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    dots Submission Name: a tear's locationdots
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    Author: irrelevantme
    Elite Ratio:    2.91 - 83/89/62
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsa tear's locationdots
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    the quiet city, in the midst of battle
    falls into brief slumber
    as glittering shards come to deny
    a growing darkness in the depths of my heart

    sleep enveloped in silver stardust
    see my hopes dangle through fingertips
    when a hollow laugh reaches my ears
    stirring the bosoms of a rose (with fear)

    I stand to face a brook
    sending a prayer-filled melody
    for a dream - to the stars reflected in deep sea
    blossoming from lips that don't speak

    I soon will sigh away
    all for just a bit of peace
    to the West! the sun's farewell path
    and wither to mirages of a memory




    Submitted on 2012-11-26 06:38:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really love this..the best I read from you so far.
    | Posted on 2012-12-16 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      Absolutely beautiful
    | Posted on 2012-12-01 00:00:00 | by metallichick786 | [ Reply to This ]
      beautiful and full of emotion. keep writing
    | Posted on 2012-11-30 00:00:00 | by nosferotu_gurl | [ Reply to This ]
      very good. poe
    | Posted on 2012-11-27 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]


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