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    dots Submission Name: Eyeshinedots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 143
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsEyeshinedots
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    The moon is a whisper of evil
    Dripping silver lies
    Out of a pure black sky.
    Feral dogs are lost in howling song.
    Such Wild-delight have they
    In being free.
    They think they own the night;
    But the eyeshine girl is all mine.
    Yes tonight I fell in love with a Zombie
    And tonight she fell in love with my brain.
    Her molten eyes glisten and dance as in
    A trance she stumbles after
    her new infatuation
    Me.
    Her body is so lovely with an awkward
    Grace,
    Her teeth are so white,
    I swear she would like to eat me
    In
    A single bite.
    Her moans are music
    Her perfume
    Is unquestionably her own.
    I really think she is going to
    Follow me home.
    I wonder if mom will let me
    keep her.





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