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    dots Submission Name: Vanishdots

    Author: Bloodstone
    ASL Info:    3.4/ ink/ Asylum empire
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 108/138/121
    Words: 158
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    This waste I carry – should have
    (without force) taken notes
    Now its best left behind
    Out of reach and out of time

    I recoil but even this is lacking purpose
    Should have; I choose not to (poisoned by envy)
    I deserve my beatings
    I take them with confidence – I take them… silent

    This disease I carry – shouldn’t have laid
    upon the mind
    But you seek and you speak,
    not with voice, not with noise
    Loud mute hands cleaning up the mess

    Search for love in the most ruined lands
    Dark bird dark bird who am I to curse about
    Who am I to witch about
    Not you I say not you I say

    Wrap me in your cancer an make love
    Strangle me to death
    Take all I have
    Take all that’s left

    Submitted on 2012-11-30 14:10:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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