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    dots Submission Name: shapelessdots
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    Author: jeniecel
    ASL Info:    28/f/philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 313/373/169
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    at the end of a midnight drama
    she takes in a cloth, feeling the built-in limits
    of a touch from ghost fingers.
    as these elliptical time of confusion
    sunk deep as footprints in snow
    the shape of what has come to rescue her.

    his absence do not deplete the bone bare faces
    of silence possessive of the hours
    along with the numbness of the world
    words and feelings he wrote again
    where she straws a nest.

    she casts a shadow not her own
    as the weight of air receives the burden
    of his vagueness and mantles her
    death
    as love walks in half steps.









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      I hear a faint yet sonorous bell toll somewhere
    In foggy darkness. If this poem was a movie
    There would be creeping shadows outside
    And a storm would be brewing even while
    Our heroine appears to be safe and warm
    inside
    I really hope her hero shows up in time,

    (at the end of a midnight drama
    she takes in a cloth, feeling the built-in limits
    of a touch from ghost fingers.
    an elliptical time of confusion
    footprints sunk deeply in snow
    the shape of what has come to rescue her.

    his absence does not deplete the bone bare faces
    of silence- possessive, of the hours
    along with the numbness of the world
    words and feelings he wrote again
    where she straws a nest.

    she casts a shadow not her own
    as the weight of air receives the burden
    of his vagueness and mantles her
    death
    as love walks in half steps.)
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      This is really beautiful. I love the strawing the nest part, and bare bone face lines. It really speaks of loving someone who is gone and leaves you behind without ever really leaving you at all.
    | Posted on 2012-12-06 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]


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