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    dots Submission Name: Moon Musicdots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 185
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMoon Musicdots
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    As the white moon rises
    Reflecting the glow
    Of your glistening eyes
    The night resounds with the music
    Of dreams of harmony and decadence
    Embellished by the cadence of love
    You are made of the most delicate essence
    It melts in my mouth
    Like nectar from the table of angels

    As the white moon blazes
    You stroll naked through the room
    Setting my heart to pound
    In admiration of your
    Resplendent display
    You smile your intent
    As deep as the sea as
    Indomitable as mountains

    As the white moon is made molten
    I am entranced by your poses
    Enthralled by the nearness of your curves
    As permanent as poison I inhale your
    Perfume and contemplate the kisses
    I will place on your thighs
    Tracing my tongue up to those lips

    The white moon is ravished
    My willpower is slain I rise
    To my encore those sweet cries
    And embraces
    that blaze through the night
    O sweet defeat you have
    Devoured me again
















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      I dont understand the defeat part at the end. But then again I dont get why men think Naked is all that either :_)

    But I like the way you write out pictures.
    | Posted on 2012-12-09 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]


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