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    dots Submission Name: Never Ending Beautydots
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    Author: SavedDragon
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    dotsNever Ending Beautydots
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    This rose I hold in my hand,
    so beautiful and so pure was soon to die,
    I knew it would but I was in denial
    a rose that stood so tall and sleek
    and never hunched its back,
    it glowed with the sun
    and it drank the rain
    and never would have
    let its life go.

    I knew that one day it would
    and still I was in denial,
    one day I saw one of its
    petals fall to the ground
    slowly but surely it did,
    I thought that I would pick it up
    and forgive it for letting it fall
    but it did not hear me and still
    let them all fall one by one to its roots.

    A rose once so vibrant
    was now letting its life go
    letting everything fall down,
    I still held all its broken petals
    I held them close to my heart and forgave it
    Its color now a faded black,
    the rose was going away in front of me
    it hunched it's back
    and faced the ground with guilt now,
    but just so that I would not see its face.

    It hid from the sun and chose to stop drinking water,
    this rose had no petals left on its stem
    and left me alone,
    but I will never forget its beauty
    because memories last a lifetime
    and beauty never fades away,
    and all its beautiful petals are still red
    in my own eyes
    I look at it now,
    a tear down my cheek
    and a seed that was planted by me.




    Submitted on 2012-12-04 18:16:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Nothing in this world is immortal. You can cherish the beauty of this world for sometime but not always.
    | Posted on 2012-12-12 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      This remnds me at the end of tha movie Inception, like you killed it accidentally by making it kill itself. I am guessing this isnt about a flower, right?
    | Posted on 2012-12-09 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]


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