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    dots Submission Name: Sheddots
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    Author: lebeauvide
    ASL Info:    24/F
    Elite Ratio:    2.29 - 75/295/165
    Words: 117
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Eat my skin away from my bones.
    I just want to hear your whispers.
    I hope that you think that the beauty of my insides
    overshadows that of my outside.

    Take a bite out of my heart, won't you?
    Let my soul run over your lips.
    Tell me that I taste like heaven,
    and you'd like to take home leftovers.

    I just want you to be a part of me.
    Won't you bury your face in my inner thighs,
    turn on the faucet,
    and drink me dry?

    Your exoskeleton is too small.
    Shed it, and let me climb inside of you,
    while you shake the water off of your wings.
    Carry me away.




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      I really enjoyed the way you wrote this. I love it when poetry is descriptive and imaginative in unusual ways. I feel it really brings the piece alive. I like how it was yearning, full of desire and want, pleading a bit, like the piece itself was tugging to be read. It flowed really well with the exception of this part

    "and you'd like to take home leftovers"

    at first read it sounded weird but as I re read it, it sounded fine, so I don't know if it was just me or it actually kind of stops you....

    This piece is dark and loving, and almost like a perfume.. with subtle hints of sexual tension.

    Overall great read... this is going in the favorites pile...
    | Posted on 2012-12-10 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]
      :) I really love this. Someone to climb under your skin and just love everything else about you. What a delight, how rare. I hope somebody loves me like this some day.
    | Posted on 2012-12-10 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]


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