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    dots Submission Name: Destinydots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsDestinydots
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                   A blue moon is dripping diamonds
                   onto a flawless sky
                   And I am fast falling
                   into the wonder of your eyes
                   Darling open yourself to me
                   and bid my blood
                   to quickly rise

                   I want to be inside you deep
                   And deeply dreaming

                   As the world around us fades away
                   Breathe me real
                   While I whisper in your ear
                   I have never
                   Felt more alive

                   And if the heat of my hardness
                   Moans you sweet
                   Still
                   It is your lips
                   That command me wise





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      Romantic and yet saucy at the same time.
    | Posted on 2012-12-20 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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