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    dots Submission Name: Fair Tradedots

    Author: EmptyBox
    Elite Ratio:    3.47 - 76/64/31
    Words: 148
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    dotsFair Tradedots

    I want fresh pineapples everyday, and bananas
    with 2% milk and honey-roasted peanut butter,
    which isn't a lot to ask for in comparison to pedicures
    or the high-end expectations of the last blonde-locked
    ambition that you coiled around your arm.

    Pears and carrots, green-leaf lettuce, tomatoes
    with a bag of yellow lemons. A window to the city.
    A ticket out of foster homes and ramen noodles
    and halfway houses where bitches beat you down
    and break your ankle for a used laptop and hairbrush.

    I'll grow out of this cast and into my wings, fold you
    into my body, and when I find my voice I'll sing
    like a little jeweled bird in her Emperor's cage.
    You'll age, and I'll pretend I never notice. We'll be
    what poets call Spring and Winter, and live Happily.

    Submitted on 2012-12-08 14:36:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I have to wonder if you are not selling yourself short in the first stanza? Don't you deserve the pedicures and other perks the blonde
    | Posted on 2013-03-17 00:00:00 | by DaleP | [ Reply to This ]
      this is absolutely beautiful. real or imagined. there's a rhythm in it that can carry a very nice voice as well. sounds like longing. for change and for a man. hope it works out, or at least it works out enough to move on and find something like what you're looking for. and sounds like a realistic way to want.
    | Posted on 2012-12-18 00:00:00 | by Arjay | [ Reply to This ]

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