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    dots Submission Name: Hour Of The Goddessdots
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    Author: C. Starr
    ASL Info:    35/yesplz/State of denial
    Elite Ratio:    4.22 - 130/196/68
    Words: 264
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1074
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1470



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       Written 2005


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    dotsHour Of The Goddessdots
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    In the hour of the goddess,
    The night time becomes me.
    I wear nothing but her moonlight on my skin,
    In these woods we gather.
    We form into a circle.
    We chant your name three times.
    And then I begin...
    I speak aloud the hurt you brought.
    The lies you told.
    We start to dance...
    We speak secret words of revenge three times fold.
    Slowly...
    Our circle flows.
    To a rhythm only we can hear.
    I throw into the fire...
    A small thing you once held dear.
    My circle throws things from the earth.
    Dirt, herbs, leaves & worms.
    I cut my palm and drip blood into the fire.
    As an offering to her,
    So the goddess may see my soul is clean.
    Three times we chant your name.
    I tell the goddess about you...
    I speak aloud the hurt you brought.
    The lies you told.
    Our circle flows.
    We speak secret words of revenge upon you three times fold.
    You shall be hurt.
    You shall reap the pain you bring.
    We speak these words and three times we chant your name.
    There are six of us.
    Six points of light.
    We each pick up our candles, tall & white.
    Secret words of revenge we speak.
    To start the justice you will reap.
    The circle has spoken.
    Now, dear sisters.
    Our spell is complete.





    Submitted on 2012-12-11 01:29:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This piece sounds quite well written. You have a nice flow and you describe your feelings, strong feelings quite well. You did a good job in following and adding to a topic that is a little played out. this almost reminded me of a scene in a movie.
    | Posted on 2012-12-11 00:00:00 | by ladydeathstrike | [ Reply to This ]


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