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First Experiences

Author: expiring_touch
ASL Info:    30/f/Hamburg
Elite Ratio:    3.94 - 139 /256 /171
Words: 58
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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First Experiences

New faces - he packed them in a train, unneatly,
heavily depressed air pressed
against the slouching Asian shoulders - not one
is walking straight - oh what to do when the
very sky is the oppressor! What will
O Lotus Eaters
Take me in
your tight embrace?!

Submitted on 2012-12-11 23:49:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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