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    dots Submission Name: First Experiencesdots
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    Author: expiring_touch
    ASL Info:    26/f/Hamburg
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 136/243/154
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFirst Experiencesdots
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    New faces - he packed them in a train, unneatly,
    heavily depressed air pressed
    against the slouching Asian shoulders - not one
    is walking straight - oh what to do when the
    very sky is the oppressor! What will
    you
    I
    do
    if
    this
    whirlpool
    O Lotus Eaters
    Take me in
    your tight embrace?!




    Submitted on 2012-12-11 23:49:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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