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    dots Submission Name: Passiondots
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    Author: Raphael
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 769/389/199
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsPassiondots
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    Her head on his shoulder
    He stares through the seats,
    Out the windscreen,
    Through cloud smothered stars;
    The lights one might mistake as morning
    Flashes barely moving his lips
    Slight shaking from the cold
    Dread of passion.
    This is passion;
    The lifeless river he has conjured
    And will let pass over him.
    This is passion;
    Unmoving in the seats,
    Ignorant of stars,
    Fogged up by memories
    And harsh Winter wounds.
    This is lying together
    Absent-mindedly
    For the briefest of moments.
    Out the window,
    Uncaring as it seems
    When the dawn comes eventually
    It brings with it it's cold white wrath.




    Submitted on 2012-12-12 10:57:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I wish you would have written more concerning her.

    Your illustrations of passion are definitive, yet I am unsure of what your "lifeless river" truly describes? It's as if you both are dying, or she is already gone...

    If you wouldn't mind discussing your work here, it would be great to hear from you, I believe your writing stands out but I am always careful to not assume I understand the author's background or inspiration. Either way, very moving language, thanks for sharing.

    -Tony
    | Posted on 2012-12-13 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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