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    dots Submission Name: Hello Moondots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 189
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsHello Moondots
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                                  The Maiden Moon glows
                                  on cold concrete
                                  The wind howls me alive
                                  and the sun commits suicide.

                                  The better half of creation
                                  You pirouette before the stars
                                  As I stand in total silence
                                  possessed and in awe

                                  I am far into my days
                                  wondering lost in the
                                  wildwood ways

                                  Yet you are the precursor
                                  to dawn.

                                  I was in a dream
                                  while you were dreaming.
                                  And in this dream you dreamed.
                                  I was there yet dreaming
                                  And all our dreams
                                  were dreamed by two.

                                  A moment of mad
                                  A token of sad
                                  All in a world
                                  of glorious
                                  You

                                  My heart is set
                                  to we are not there yet.
                                  And nothing will stop
                                  its rapid beating.

                                  There must be some limitation
                                  beyond mere flesh.
                                  For surely my heart has surpassed
                                  the cage of my chest

                                  Bare skinned honesty finds
                                  me in ascension with you.
                                  If we focus long enough
                                  to allow this thought
                                  its day
                                  you will see
                                  It isn't every day that the Moon
                                  stops to say hello.




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    ||| Comments |||
      "Hello Moon", now where have I heard that before? I'll be reposting mine soon as I get the ending straightened out. I have 'pirouette' too.

    In all honestly the ending falls a little flat for me--the rest, well you could leave out the first bit and start out with

    I am far into my days
    wondering lost in the
    wildwood ways

    and from here on it soars.
    Maybe I just don't 'get' the ending?
    | Posted on 2012-12-15 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]
      this is just lovely Dale. I especially like the last stanza.

    " It isn't every day that the Moon
    stops to say hello." this is my fave line.


    jen
    | Posted on 2012-12-15 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]


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