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    dots Submission Name: Distant Shores dots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsDistant Shores dots
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                                  the beach trembles.
                                  the palms bow their fronds
                                  in supplication to graceful form
                                  rivulets of sun run to caress
                                  the shape of love bare

                                  a beam of bright spotlights
                                  a surging tide of raw-
                                  desire flows in endless mounting                               waves
                                  to thrum and meet in peak

                                  passion flushes hot
                                  kisses on churning shore

                                  pulsing fury
                                  swells in endless tempest
                                  longing for the sheath of
                                  purity
                                  where only symphonic
                                  stroking may then tame
                                  a man's primeval nature

                                  rent and spent of strength
                                  rivulets run teasing fingers
                                  with the taste of merriment
                                  upon their tips

                                  the sun sighs content to watch
                                  as beauty stands
                                  dressed in innocence
                                  sweetly subduing
                                  force of nature
                                  by her gift




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    ||| Comments |||
      Lyric beauty. A poem with substance and style.
    | Posted on 2012-12-25 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]
      "sweetly subduing force of nature by her gift"...that, my friend is pure genius. Great Job man. Excellent work here.
    | Posted on 2012-12-17 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]


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