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    dots Submission Name: More Than Dreamsdots

    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsMore Than Dreamsdots

                             Someday I will hold you
                             and sing you lullabies.
                             I will kiss your eyelids softly
                             and whisper gold
                             into your dreams.

                             When the nighttime holds a chill
                             my arms will keep you safe and warm.
                             My lap will be your pillow
                             while I caress your brow.

                             When you wake with words
                             upon your lips I will listen
                             with all of my attention.
                             All the while delving deep
                             into your morning eyes.

    Submitted on 2012-12-22 12:40:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I love that this is a love poem that doesn't use the word 'love' yet still shows the love you will give. I also love how you proclaim 'I will' instead of hoping, wishing, wanting, or dreaming. It's a promise without actually using the word 'promise'. I dig it

    | Posted on 2013-01-10 00:00:00 | by MmR | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very gentle. Makes me think of something an expectant parent would write, the promise of lullabies, whispering gold into dreams, waking with words and listening with attention, caressing brow, kissing eyelids, all chaste activities a parent would indulge in. The picture of course does not quite fit that scenario I guess. But it all sounds very nice.
    | Posted on 2013-01-06 00:00:00 | by ponykeeper | [ Reply to This ]

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