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    dots Submission Name: Chance Visitdots
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    Author: nwproud
    ASL Info:    27 / vancouver, wa
    Elite Ratio:    5.62 - 280/243/64
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsChance Visitdots
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    Your room is shuttered with fear,
    composed of scornful years and
    disregarded love notes.
    Please me, would you, by allowing
    me inside, a mere moment of your time
    out of the cold.
    Half-heartedly, we speak of
    simple things, of work and money,
    nothing of time lost, however.
    Given the intricacy of your
    floorplan, the context of a neat
    wedding collage, the chance
    of my visit alleviates
    little of our final words ten years prior.
    My hostage, my stranger,
    perhaps we will never truly learn
    each other's first name.
    I excuse myself, I must be going,
    the time has passed
    for the issue mistakenly addressed
    as somewhat romantic.
    You take care now, Thief,
    I say as, smiling, I exit her door.




    Submitted on 2012-12-23 10:49:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This reminds me of myself. It is difficult for we females to know what it is that we really do want. So fickle and insecure. And i use to think I was brave! SOunds like you know how to pick em Mr Artist.
    | Posted on 2012-12-31 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Did she steal his heart? :-)
    | Posted on 2012-12-26 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]


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