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    dots Submission Name: Waitingdots
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    Author: blankscreen
    ASL Info:    22/f/NY
    Elite Ratio:    5.57 - 222/196/163
    Words: 153
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsWaitingdots
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    I believe you are happy.
    I believe we made the right choice.
    Because the past can't be forgotten
    No matter how much we scream
    And lose our voices.

    I have learned not to hate you so much
    Or love you so much
    Sometimes when I look at you
    You are nothing more than a stranger
    embodied in a body I once knew
    Trying to change
    And I am trying to let you

    I just can't watch romantic movies anymore
    Or stay up to late
    And too alone
    I just can't think of brownies anymore
    Or french toast
    Or egg whites
    There are still little pieces of you every where I go
    But now they are just crumbs

    Our trips around the world
    Are now my trips around the world
    Because you walked out
    One year ago.

    I hope you are doing well.
    Sometimes I still miss you.




    Submitted on 2012-12-26 21:26:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Mmmm, brownies. French toast. Eggs.

    Great, now I'm hungry. As Pooh once said, "There's a rumbly in my tumbly."

    There are always people who were a big part of your life at one point who are no longer there. But don't let their absence stop you from doing the things that you love. Because when you stop being YOU, then you are no longer YOU. Does that make sense? It might make you remember the past, but that doesn't mean you have to stay there. Just remember, you're never too alone.

    "Here's looking at you kid."
    Phillip
    | Posted on 2012-12-31 00:00:00 | by Swimming Bird | [ Reply to This ]
      Very heartfelt, I feel as though each line of this piece of writing has an independent purpose, composing a much greater message.

    One of the better parts about this piece is that there is a definite introduction, body, and closing. The only change I might suggest? Line 2 or Lines 25-26. The impression you are offering is that you do not believe things are how they should be, could be, or for the best. You miss him, and though your decision to part was initially mutual, your heart has changed, and you want things to return to the way they were, 1 year prior. You should expand on this...

    This is a good piece of writing. Thanks for sharing.

    -Tony
    | Posted on 2012-12-28 00:00:00 | by nwproud | [ Reply to This ]


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