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    dots Submission Name: Lost and Founddots
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    Author: annie0888
    ASL Info:    49/f/LA
    Elite Ratio:    4.76 - 327/382/122
    Words: 156
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    You opened my purse, looking for clues
    And found them - ticket stubs to matinees
    Long poems written in waiting rooms
    And you knew I found someone

    The refrigerator chills bottles of wine
    Beer and rum loosened my tongue
    And my grip. When I laughed
    You sensed I found someone new

    You tracked me to the trails where I run
    Then lost me. I disappeared among the trees
    To meet a stranger. You checked my mail, my credit
    My internet history. Chased the ghost of my new love

    I found the rhythms of new songs to move to
    Another sign for you that we were over
    Music replaced the white noise of our silences
    You knew that I was leaving for someone else

    The only clue you missed was standing
    Behind you in the bathroom mirror
    Looking over your shoulder waiting
    While you washed your hands




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      I can completely relate to this. I get lost in love and once finding me again well...it is over.

    So well done...I have nothing to say other then Thank You for sharing I'll definitely be viewing more!

    Peace
    Kelly
    | Posted on 2014-05-26 00:00:00 | by clay | [ Reply to This ]
      you lost me, she said
    come again? he replied
    no need, never mind
    said the friend at her side....

    Just more thoughts on your thoughts about the end and the beginning of relational thoughts.
    | Posted on 2013-01-02 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      Thanks Frank, for reading and commenting on my poem, "Lost and Found". Hope you enjoyed it!

    annie
    | Posted on 2013-01-01 00:00:00 | by annie0888 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really despise anyone going through my purse... I had someone who did that once, and it was the end of all things. I probably wouldn't have ever left him if he hadn't started doing that, but what he suggested and accused me of doing just opened the doorway to me actually doing it. If you're going to be accused, you might as well just do it.

    This is marvelous. I love the way it was written, without bitter angst or anything other than factual information, and I loved the ending especially.
    | Posted on 2013-01-01 00:00:00 | by EmptyBox | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes indeed, a never ending issue for all of us I guess. Is it best to find something, then lose it or, lose something, then find it once more ?

    Anyway, an insightful piece from you....well written.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2013-01-01 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]


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