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    dots Submission Name: Your Light Shines Brightdots

    Author: spacedoutboy
    ASL Info:    22/M/Il
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 32/48/23
    Words: 224
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 660
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       I believe that there are clairvoyants out there that will eventually become a channel for significant events to take place.

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    dotsYour Light Shines Brightdots

    Drawl all the words from your mouth
    You'll never need to speak again
    Rage pouring from your soul out
    They think they wont see you again

    The entity is fore bound
    We're gunna' need you through the end
    So bring the measurements about
    By then you will see me again

    We need this harmless endangering
    All this is riding on you
    Show them your full light
    The fire burning in you

    You'll have to show their ending
    The warmth of deaths' embrace
    The cold hand of vengeance
    No fear as you take them away

    They've spilled their own blood
    It will all be confided in you
    Their candles slowly burn out
    Who knew they would see you again

    They've drawn their own blood
    But still the truth remains
    They beg for penance
    A faith that they wont see again

    Bring forth the cleansing
    It will be gutted in you
    Just as you came here to be
    You've always had that strength in you

    They'll see their own blood
    And from the depths will it spew
    Your light will show them the truth
    They will only barter for you

    They will show they're understanding
    At the moment of their regret
    Leering bright your shape is forming
    Shed your tears and take them all away

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      Powerful write.
    | Posted on 2012-12-30 00:00:00 | by CrypticBard | [ Reply to This ]

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