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    dots Submission Name: Life is a Cuppadots
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    Author: CrypticBard
    Elite Ratio:    3.54 - 369/381/227
    Words: 46
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLife is a Cuppadots
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    '



    Up to a point
    pliant leaves will seep
    into all its waters
    until the cup overflows

    so much as to stain
    the meticulously starched table linen.

    (Then we shall face with reckoning
    its true substance!)




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    Submitted on 2013-01-02 17:43:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Up to a point
    the leaves will seep
    into all the waters
    until the cup overflows

    so much as to stain
    the meticulously starched table linen.


    (Then we shall face with reckoning
    its true substance!)

    I think you could delete the last bit in brackets and let the poem overflow.

    cheers
    | Posted on 2013-01-13 00:00:00 | by timepet | [ Reply to This ]
      Amen. I genuinly like this beyond just appreciating what you have put on the table. Great metaphor. Good imagery. Very original piece, my favorite part!

    | Posted on 2013-01-03 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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