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    dots Submission Name: fallen faces limits us in crawl spacesdots

    Author: pioneerheart
    Elite Ratio:    4.51 - 204/205/140
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Rant/Them
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    dotsfallen faces limits us in crawl spacesdots

    Idols with shadows
    Heathen in Sackloth
    Sight is a curse or a blessing
    Mind is a reel that begins/ends
    Follow the unknown trail
    Fail, sail, stand and shudder
    What we fear is from the darkness

    Don't be worried
    Listen to the voice
    Don't drown it
    Some will not support
    Follow despite the withered envy
    They will see your light
    Wish they knew more than the mere

    Lies to get close
    To take what is yours
    Guides will be ghosts
    There in the mist
    Understand the difference
    Sent to show
    The world
    The light
    Heal them all
    Not without
    With your soul

    Do you wonder why?
    Their faces hang
    No escape
    When young and green
    Haven't seen
    Haven't been
    Keep moving
    Or you'll petrify
    Like ordinary men
    In a dead place
    Where there's no hope
    Only faces
    Above we fly
    Until we whisper
    Embrace joy
    Miss the ones
    That never know
    What you once
    That tricks to
    Makes you think
    It's the only way
    To feel Alive
    Less creative
    Make your world
    So limited

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      Hmm..how weird and yet I like it..a little confusing, kinda like my own prose. Very nice.:-P
    | Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]

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