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fallen faces limits us in crawl spaces

Author: pioneerheart
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a view when I was green

fallen faces limits us in crawl spaces

Idols with shadows
Heathen in Sackloth
Sight is a curse or a blessing
Mind is a reel that begins/ends
Follow the unknown trail
Fail, sail, stand and shudder
What we fear is from the darkness

Don't be worried
Listen to the voice
Don't drown it
Some will not support
Follow despite the withered envy
They will see your light
Wish they knew more than the mere

Lies to get close
To take what is yours
Guides will be ghosts
There in the mist
Understand the difference
Sent to show
The world
The light
Heal them all
Not without
With your soul

Do you wonder why?
Their faces hang
No escape
When young and green
Haven't seen
Haven't been
Keep moving
Or you'll petrify
Like ordinary men
In a dead place
Where there's no hope
Only faces
Above we fly
Until we whisper
Embrace joy
Miss the ones
That never know
What you once
That tricks to
Makes you think
It's the only way
To feel Alive
Less creative
Make your world
So limited

Submitted on 2013-01-03 04:37:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Comments weird and yet I like it..a little confusing, kinda like my own prose. Very nice.:-P
| Posted on 2013-01-15 00:00:00 | by Damien Vladimir | [ Reply to This ]

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