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    dots Submission Name: no matter what the paindots
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    Author: Kaygrl
    ASL Info:    26/female/Washington
    Elite Ratio:    2.43 - 162/239/241
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    You always pull me close;
    Whispering words of doubt,
    Not letting me walk away-
    Not letting me break free.

    You hold my hand when no ones knows;
    Just to watch me fall.
    You only kiss me in the dark;
    So naught to watch me break.

    When friendship turns to more-
    And I'm here still wondering,
    Tho I know that this will never change,
    No matter what the pain.

    You won't tell me straight,
    And I won't face my fears;
    In an endless vicious cycle,
    The ties will fail to sever-
    No matter what the pain.





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      I wonder why i couldnt comment on this before but now am able to. Its like how monad said he couldnt comment on my posts but others could. Anyways this was great. I knew once insaw your last post that i had been to your page before and that i had really loved this piece. Like i said, it reminds me of my current relationship. And you described every feeling so well. The longing of wanting a reciprocated love. Great job


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    | Posted on 2014-07-25 00:00:00 | by kase | [ Reply to This ]


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